In some countries, government safety laws include things such as wearing a hard hat on a building site or wearing safety clothes in certain factories. To what extent are laws of this kind good idea? What sort of safety law would you introduce, if you were given a chance? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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certain
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a certain
the certain

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number of governments
safety
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regulations
detrmain
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determine

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wearing particular hats
an
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and

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clothes
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for
worker
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workers

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in certain
factories
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.
This
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will essay explore
that
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apply

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how
this
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action is effective
due to
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protect
workforce
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the workforce

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against any possible danger,
as well as
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, allowing people to work
easier
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more easily

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in hard conditions and will
introduces
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introduce

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other possible
safety
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laws
such
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as using particular
equipments
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equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment

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and
avoid
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avoiding

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using digital
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divices
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devices

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in some certain areas.
This
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regulation
protect
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protects

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workers
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from unpredictable dangers
such
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as
hit
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hits

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. If
workers
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wear hard
hat
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hats

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, they are protected against any possible hit to their head.
For example
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, in
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factories
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factories,

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whih
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which

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is
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are

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associated with heavy stones,
workers
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might be in danger of hit to their
head
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heads

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and using
hard
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a hard

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hat could lower
this
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risk.
Furthermore
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, these
clothes
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assist
workers
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to perform better in harsh
circomstances
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circumstances

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. Some
factories
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might have
spacial
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special

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conditions
such
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as high
tempretures
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temperatures

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,
therefore
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, these
safety
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clothes
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protect
workers
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.
Additionally
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, there are some sorts of laws which can protect
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the worksforce
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worksforce
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workforce

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properly like obligating them to use particular
equipments
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equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment

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such
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as
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divices
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devices

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which monitor their
helth
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health

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condition at work.
This
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could be effective
espacially
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especially

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for those with heart
problem
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problems

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.
Moreover
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, using some devices
such
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as phones or
lap-tops
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laptops

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in some parts of
factories
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might cause fire
ore
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or

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damage,
therefore
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, restraining these devices should be considered.
For instance
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, in nuclear plants phones are restricted
due to
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the
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apply

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any possible
dameges
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damages
damage

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which stem from their signals. In conclusion, using
hard
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a hard
the hard

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hat
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hats

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and
espacial
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especial

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clothes
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can
fandamentally
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fundamentally

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assist
workers
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in some
factories
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by
lifegaurding
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lifeguarding
safeguarding

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them against
hit
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hits

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,
as well as
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facilitating the harsh work situations.
Moreover
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, some rules are suggested to
providing
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provide

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safety
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like carrying
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Use synonyms

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divices
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devices

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for
traking
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tracking
taking

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their
overall
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well-being and restricting some digital
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Use synonyms

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divices
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devices

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in certain
factories
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Coherence and Cohesion
Try to focus on clearly organizing your thoughts into separate paragraphs. You have a good structure potential, but it could be more divided between distinct introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion patterns.
Task Achievement
Work on developing your main points more fully. You have good ideas, but they could be explored more comprehensively to enhance clarity and support for your argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
Watch for minor spelling and grammatical errors, which slightly distract from the clarity of your task response. Although they don't significantly impact your argument, they are noticeable.
Task Achievement
Your essay demonstrates a clear understanding of the need for safety laws and provides specific examples such as hard hats and monitoring devices.
Coherence and Cohesion
You've concluded your argument well by summarizing the main points and linking it back to the safety regulations. This helps reinforce your opinion effectively.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your writing has a clear introduction and conclusion, which frames your argument nicely and gives it a logical flow.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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