Some people consider price as the most important thing to think about when buying a product (such as cell phone) or a service (e.g. medical treatment). Do you agree or disagree?

Nowsaday
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Nowadays
, some
person
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people
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think
price
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the price
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is the most important thing before buying a
product
. I agree
of
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that it is because some
product
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products
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can have other
way
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ways
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to buy and it is cheaper so it is important to think
the
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about the
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price
before buying a
product
. First of all, not rich
people
buy
everthing
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everything
will think about
price
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the price
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before buying
product
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the product
a product
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. It is because they don't have
many
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much
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money to buy things if use too many they may
don't
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not
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have money to eat.
For example
,
buying
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when buying
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food in
supermarket
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the supermarket
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so many
people
think it is too
exspentive
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expensive
so they will go to
wet
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the wet
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market to
replace
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replace it
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, it will be cheaper. So not rich
people
buy everything
will
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and will
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think about
price
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the price
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before buying a
product
.
Next,
some
people
will think about
the
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whether the
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product
is
it
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apply
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suitable for the
price
before buying things. It is because some
product
is very
exspentive
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expensive
and the
product
is not suitable for the
price
, so
people
will not buy.
For example
,
apple
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the apple
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head
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headphones
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phone
is
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apply
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too
exspentive
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expensive
and
it
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apply
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is not suitable for the
price
so
people
will buy
other
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others
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to replace
it
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them
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. So some
people
will think about the
product
is it suitable for the
price
before buying things. Those are the
reason
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reasons
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that I agree
of
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with
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some
person
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people
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think
price
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the price
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is the most important thing before buying a
product
.
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  • manage finances
  • high quality
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  • durability
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