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Some people consider price as the most important thing to think about when buying a product (such as cell phone) or a service (e.g. medical treatment). Do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction
Nowsaday
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Nowadays
, some
person
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people
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 think
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price
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the price
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 is the most important thing before buying a
product
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. I agree
of
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apply
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that it is because some
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product
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products
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 can have other
way
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ways
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 to buy and it is cheaper so it is important to think
the
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about the
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price
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 before buying a
product
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.
Body paragraph 1
First of all, not rich
people
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 buy
everthing
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everything
 will think about
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price
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the price
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 before buying
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product
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the product
a product
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. It is because they don't have
many
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much
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 money to buy things if use too many they may
don't
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not
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 have money to eat.
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,
buying
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when buying
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 food in
supermarket
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the supermarket
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 so many
people
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 think it is too
exspentive
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expensive
 so they will go to
wet
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the wet
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 market to
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replace it
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, it will be cheaper. So not rich
people
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 buy everything
will
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and will
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 think about
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price
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the price
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 before buying a
product
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.
Body paragraph 2
Next,
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some
people
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 will think about
the
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whether the
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product
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 is
it
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apply
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suitable for the
price
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 before buying things. It is because some
product
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 is very
exspentive
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expensive
 and the
product
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 is not suitable for the
price
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, so
people
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 will not buy.
For example
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,
apple
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the apple
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head
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headphones
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 phone
is
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apply
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too
exspentive
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expensive
 and
it
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apply
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is not suitable for the
price
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 so
people
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 will buy
other
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others
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 to replace
it
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them
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. So some
people
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 will think about the
product
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 is it suitable for the
price
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 before buying things.
Conclusion
Those are the
reason
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reasons
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 that I agree
of
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with
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 some
person
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people
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 think
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price
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the price
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 is the most important thing before buying a
product
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.

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Coherence and Cohesion
Organize your essay logically with clear paragraphs for each idea and a conclusion to recap your stance.
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Provide clear examples that are specific and closely related to your main points.
Task Achievement
Make sure to fully develop all of your ideas to present a stronger argument.
Language
Enhance your language accuracy and diversify your vocabulary to express your ideas more clearly.
Task Achievement
Clear main opinion stated in the introduction.
Coherence and Cohesion
You connected the idea of price to everyday decisions effectively.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget
  • prioritize
  • manage finances
  • high quality
  • affordable
  • effective
  • durable
  • essential services
  • efficacy
  • compromise one's health
  • long-term savings
  • durability
  • efficiency
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