The table below shows the household composition in a North American country from 1970 and 2003. Summarize information and make comparison where relevant.

The table chart illustrates the mix of
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in
a
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North America
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the years
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1970 and 2003.
Overall
, the percentage of married
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couples
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led in 2 years.
While
the
proportion
of non-family
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increased dramatically. In 1970 the arrangement of
mother
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a mother
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with her
kid
was 9%.
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percentage had
father
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a father
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with his
kid
. The leader of
this
year-married
couple
,
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had approximately
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of
overall
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proportion
. The lowest figure in
this
year is room sharing. Just
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1% more had people who lived as a single. The 3% more than one-tenth had
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who shared a room. 2 indexes rose significantly in 2003. The opposite trend was with married
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. More precisely the
proportion
of room sharing and single person jumped from 3% and 4% to 11% and 13% respectively.
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, the
proportion
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dropped exactly 20% and had 41% in 2003. The figures
such
as mother with
kid
and father with
kid
added 1% to their performance which was in 1970.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
Vocabulary: Replace the words couple, proportion, kid with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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