The diagram below shows how geothermal is used to produce electricity.

The diagram below shows how geothermal is used to produce electricity.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The diagram below shows how geothermal is used to produce electricity.
The provided diagram,
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depicts in great detail, illustrates the process of production of
electricity
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from geothermal energy.
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, it is clearly observable that the process of generating
electricity
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through
this
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method is done in 5 steps, starting with cold
water
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pumping
as well as
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finishing with generating
electricity
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by turbine. To commence with, the first cold
water
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was pumped down to the injection well 4.5
kilometers
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long underground,
subsequently
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, the cold
water
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entered the geothermal zone (hot rocks) and moved to the production well and produced hot
water
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. On the flip side,
finally
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, hot
water
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is produced by the geothermal zone, pumped up to the condenser
then
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steam is produced.
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, the turbine is powered by steam and starts spinning the next energy produced. In the final step, the generator is powered by turning the turbine
as well as
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electricity
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is manufactured. Eventually, the produced
electricity
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is moved to the power network.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, water with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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