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The development of tourism contributed to English becoming the most prominent language in the world. Some people think this will (modal) lead to English becoming the only language to be spoken globally. What are the advantages and disadvantages to having one language in the world?

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It is thought by some people that English, which (subordinator) is now the most widely spoken
language
 in the
world
, may
one
 day predominate over all other languages and result in their eventual disappearance. Having (gerund)
one
language
 would (modal) certainly aid understanding and economic growth, but there will
also
 be (modal) some drawbacks.
One
 evident benefit (collocation) to having (gerund)
one
 global
language
 is that it would enable greater understanding between
countries
.
In other words
, if everyone spoke
one
language
, there would be complete understanding between not only
countries
 but all people around the
world
 which would promote learning,
the
Correct word choice
and the
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 flow of information and ideas. Another reason that
one
language
 would be advantageous is that it would help economic growth. With all people speaking the same
language
, there would be fewer barriers and
therefore
 trade would flourish between
countries
, resulting in a healthier
world
 economy.
On the other hand
, there are obvious downsides to having only
one
 global
language
.
Firstly
 ), it would mean that all other languages would eventually disappear and
along with
 them, their
cultures
 . The diversity of
cultures
 is
one
 of the joys that the
world
 has to offer. Each culture is unique in its own way of life and own perspectives of the
world
 which would be lost if there was only
one
language
.
Secondly
, it would result in the collapse of tourism because there would be no reason to travel for pleasure and interest if all
countries
 had the same landscapes and similar
cultures
.
This
 would devastate many
countries
 economically which rely on tourism as a source of income.
To sum up
,
while
 there are plus points to having
one
 global
language
, too much would be lost
as a result
. Maintaining local languages and
cultures
 should be prioritised to ensure a rich
world
 heritage for future generations. (38)
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task achievement
Be mindful of the balance between advantages and disadvantages. Consider providing specific examples to strengthen the points about cultural loss and economic impact.
coherence cohesion
Ensure paragraph transitions are smooth. You might use more linking words to guide the reader through your arguments.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear structure with a well-defined introduction and conclusion.
coherence cohesion
Ideas are logically presented, and each paragraph focuses on a single aspect of the topic.
task achievement
Provides a thoughtful explanation of both benefits and drawbacks related to having one global language.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Prominent
  • Contribute
  • Global
  • Advantages
  • Disadvantages
  • Communication
  • Understanding
  • Ease
  • Business
  • Trade
  • Cultural exchange
  • Unity
  • Access
  • Information
  • Simplify
  • Travel
  • Tourism
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