Some people believe that global warming is today’s most pressing environmental problem. At the same time, some consider deforestation to have the most devastating impact on the world. Discuss both views and give your opinion on the same.
In
this
contemporary era, the environment is suffering due to
human activities. A group of people believe that the prime issue of environmental problems is global warming, while
the other group assumes that deforestation has a significant impact on harming the planet
. In this
essay, both statements will be elucidated and argued in favour of the latter.
On the one hand, global warming plays a crucial role in demolishing our planet
. This
happens due to
the greenhouse gases which are emitted from cars and factories. These gases affect directly the ozone layer. This
layer alleviates g the radio waves which come from the sun. When the layers are destroyed, the temperature in
the Change preposition
on
planet
increases. This
reflects on the polar ice caps by melting it, so the water level will increase. In other words
, floods will happen in many places and cities will disappear. A study conducted by Manchester University highlighted that every year the sea level increases by five centimeters. If it is raised by this
ratio yearly, after one decade Alexandria city and Sydney city will be removed from the map.
On the other hand
, logging forests are harming both wild creatures. It is also
a prime reason for the wildfires. This
phenomenon is ruining animals' habitats. Over time, they will endangered. This
can affect the human and animal food chain. Additionally
, forests and plants are absorbing CO2 and extracting oxygen which is critical for our being. For instance
, seventy per cent of oxygen comes from the Amazon Forest. This
area is the lung of the Earth. By logging in, our lives are in danger. In his book, Amazon Kingdom, Professor Song Hung Mei said that if the Amazon Forest is removed from the planet
, the fires will proliferate on the planet
.
In conclusion, there will be a debate on this
argument. However
, I firmly agree that the paramount issue on the environment is deforestation. Governments around the world should collaborate to mitigate this
phenomenon.Submitted by mohannadsme on
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task achievement
Ensure that all paragraphs clearly support the thesis and address both views mentioned in the essay prompt more thoroughly. While both global warming and deforestation are discussed, further balancing and elaborating on the first perspective could enhance depth.
coherence cohesion
Work on improving the logical transitions between sentences and paragraphs. This will further enhance the readability and flow of your essay. Using cohesive devices more strategically can assist in smoothing the progression of ideas.
coherence cohesion
The essay effectively introduces the topic and provides a conclusion that summarizes the key points.
task achievement
The argument for deforestation having a significant impact includes specific examples, such as its role in influencing the food chain and affecting the Amazon Forest.
task achievement
Good use of examples such as the Manchester University study and Professor Song Hung Mei's book, which strengthen the points made.
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