Many countries believe that international tourism has harmful effects. Why do they think so? What can be done to change their views?
Some countries argue that global
tourism
has been affected negatively. As far as I am concerned, there is one main reason why those people
think this
way, and there is also
one solution to change their minds.
Some people
dislike international tourism
because it might increase conflicts
between locals and foreigners. When travelers
go to a different Change the spelling
travellers
culture's
country, they may not be used to local lifestyles and may do some rude things. Change noun form
culture
For example
, some people
like to walk and eat street foods; if they travel to Japan and still behave like this
, then
Japanese people
will consider them impolite and dirty. Therefore
, some individuals disapprove of global tourism
because they think it will increase conflicts
.
In order to change the minds of people
who disagree with international tourism
, we could acknowledge that global tourism
is a good and ideal way to make the world
more friendly. When people
from different countries meet each other, they are able to learn about various cultures and become more friendly. For instance
, all over the world
, there are Chinatowns where Asians integrate into local cultures, and at the same time, locals also
want to try Asian cuisine and interact with each other. Consequently
, locals and foreigners learn about different cultures, and the world
will be more friendly, so conflicts
will be reduced.
In conclusion, some people
are concerned that global tourism
will cause cultural conflicts
. In fact, this
problem can be resolved through learning and mutual understanding, making the world
more friendly and better.Submitted by 61260881 on
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