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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below shows the amount of money given to developing countries from five organisations from 2008 to 2011. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below shows the amount of money given to developing countries from five organisations from 2008 to 2011. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. You should write at least 150 words.
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The table depicts the total money given from five unknown participants to developing countries between 2008 and 2011.
Overall
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, all
provider's
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providers'
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 spending increased and
fluctuatived
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fluctuated
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while
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 both the fourth and the fifth organisations decreased
between
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during
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 the period. As we can see, at the beginning year, the first group donated around 0.5
billion
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dollars
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then
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 increased to almost
hit
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apply
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1
billion
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dollars
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 and dropped back and steady at 0.75
billion
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dollars
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 respectively. As the highest givers,
second
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the second
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 association constantly rose starting from 1.25, 1.5,
2.48
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and 2.48
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 and
reach
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reaching
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 more than 2.5
billion
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dollars
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 in 2011.
Moreover
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,
third
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the third
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participants
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participant's
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 money ran the same from
beginning
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the beginning
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 to the end period at 1.5
billion
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dollars
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. whilst the
last
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 two
group
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groups
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 constantly decreased their money where the fourth organiser
at
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in
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 the first year put 0.75
dollars
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then
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 dropped back to under 0.5 in the next three
year
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years
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. Same with the fifth that
firstly
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 participated by giving more than 1
billion
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dollars
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 and
close
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closed
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 it by only spending under 0.5
billion
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dollars
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words billion, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • funding
  • developing countries
  • organizations
  • donations
  • contribution
  • trends
  • stable
  • increase
  • decrease
  • fluctuation
  • notable
  • significant
  • amount
  • sum
  • beginning
  • end of the period
  • highest
  • lowest
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