The graph shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metal during 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line diagram illustrates how the price of
copper
,
nickel
and
zinc
has changed in 2014.
Overall
, it is clearly seen that
nickel
experienced
the
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downfall trend,
while
copper
and
zinc
were pretty stable in the given time period. In January,
nickel
's price was 6% higher in comparison to the previous
month
,
while
the figures for
copper
and
zinc
were 2% and 1% respectively.
However
, in the next
month
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month,
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it experienced
decline
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a decline
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for
nickel
and
copper
,
while
it was growing for
zinc
. In the next 3
months
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months,
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the prices were stable. In June
zinc
and
nickel
dropped in
the
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price significantly
with
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by
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3% and 1% respectively and were
overtook
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overtaken
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by
copper
.
However
, in the next
month
prices of all metals grew and stayed at the same level for the next 3 months.
Although
,
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apply
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a slightly
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slightly
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slight
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drop in prices happened in October, all three metals were in
positive
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the positive
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part of the table in the next
month
with 0.5%, 1%,
1.5
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and 1.5
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% for
copper
,
nickel
and
zinc
respectively.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words copper, nickel, zinc, month with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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