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The graph shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metal during 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metal during 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line diagram illustrates how the price of
copper
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,
nickel
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 and
zinc
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 has changed in 2014.
Overall
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, it is clearly seen that
nickel
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 experienced
the
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a
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 downfall trend,
while
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copper
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 and
zinc
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 were pretty stable in the given time period. In January,
nickel
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's price was 6% higher in comparison to the previous
month
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,
while
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 the figures for
copper
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 and
zinc
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 were 2% and 1% respectively.
However
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, in the next
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month
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month,
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 it experienced
decline
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a decline
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 for
nickel
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 and
copper
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,
while
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 it was growing for
zinc
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. In the next 3
months
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months,
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 the prices were stable. In June
zinc
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 and
nickel
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 dropped in
the
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apply
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price significantly
with
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by
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 3% and 1% respectively and were
overtook
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overtaken
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 by
copper
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.
However
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, in the next
month
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 prices of all metals grew and stayed at the same level for the next 3 months.
Although
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,
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apply
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a slightly
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slightly
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slight
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 drop in prices happened in October, all three metals were in
positive
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the positive
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 part of the table in the next
month
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 with 0.5%, 1%,
1.5
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and 1.5
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% for
copper
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 ,
nickel
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 and
zinc
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 respectively.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words copper, nickel, zinc, month with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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