Studies have shown that in many countries the income gap be tween the rich and poor is ever increasing. What problems can arise from this situation and what could be done to address this situation?

These days, the negative happening is that the income space among the
people
who are rich and the poor has been climbing in some
countries
.
This
essay discusses
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the matters
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a result of
this
issue and how we can solve it. Unfortunately, when the rich
people
bcome
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become
richer and poor populations become
more poor
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poorer
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in
countries
;
thereafter
, the rate of crime and
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the number
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of communities who do not have education grow. On the one hand, the rate of
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committing
crimes
increase
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and society
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not have safety when they
are in
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live in
countries
owing to the fact that the figure of poverty regions
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up. To illustrate, all
people
need some elements for living and when they are poor, they cannot provide them; in fact, they
comit
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commit
crime
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crimes
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like
boglary
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burglary
, robbery and so on.
On the other hand
, when the communities do not have
money
for their food, they do not spend
money
on their
educations
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education
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.
In other words
, the number of
people
who are able to improve
countries
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over
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period of
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.
This
probelm
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problem
can be solved by changing
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the economy
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economy
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method. It is crucial that most
countries
which have
this
matter do not have good industries and their
economy
does not have
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trend;
consequently
, I
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these
countries
create
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chance
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in which other
countries
invest their
money
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building
comapnies
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companies
and shops.
Furthermore
, they have to use
sucsseful
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successful
countries
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countries'
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experience
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for
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chnage
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change
their
economy
that
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this
gap
decline
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.
To sum up
, In my opinion, the
money
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between the rich and the poor has a negative effect on safety and
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the country
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country
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developments
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and it can
be solve
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by
alter
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the way of
economy
.
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coherence cohesion
The essay contains a clear introduction and conclusion, which help frame the discussion effectively.
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You have identified two key problems resulting from the income gap, which shows a good understanding of the topic.
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The proposed solution in the essay shows a thoughtful approach to addressing the income gap issue in various countries.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • income gap
  • social discord
  • disparity
  • entrenching
  • progressive taxation
  • redistribute
  • public services
  • economic growth
  • disposable income
  • minimum living wage
  • standard of living
  • unemployment
  • lower-skilled workers
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