The unlimited use of cars may cause problems. What are those problems? In order to reduce the problems, should we discourage people to use cars? Give a reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 words.
In
this
contemporary world, there have been too many problems due to
the irregular use
of cars. For example
, increasing air pollution, traffic congestion, and waste of fuel resources have been escalating day by day in order to use
personal vehicles
. In my opinion, we should give limited access to private vehicles
after developing our public transportation systems.
Although
cars bring multifarious benefits, they also
create too many problems on our planet. Firstly
, these traffic release harmful gases compared to public transport
, mostly greenhouse gases, to the atmosphere, which creates global warming as well as
increasing air pollution. Secondly
, a single person single vehicle creates too much traffic congestion on the road, and as a result
, people
have to waste their time and energy on the road. Thirdly
, in this
process, non-renewable oil resources are being depleted as more and more vehicles
are being used. For example
, on one bus, there are about 50 people
who can travel at a time, on the other hand
, 3-4 people
usually migrate from one place to another using the same fuel.
If we can move our people
to use
public vehicles
, more and more energy will be saved. For
this
reason, as these personal vehicles
bring fewer benefits, so we should create awareness among the people
and understand them about sustainability. Furthermore
, local transport
is usually cheaper than any other private vehicle. For example
, it costs 70 US dollars to use
personal vehicles
from Chittagong to Dhaka city in Bangladesh, however
, if we can use
public transport
, it is around 7-10 US dollars only.
In conclusion, private vehicles
are necessary for any emergency case but in normal times public transport
provides an efficient means of travel. As public vehicles
consume less energy than that
Correct pronoun usage
apply
of
private Change preposition
apply
vehicles
, so public awareness is necessary to use
more and more public transport
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