The unlimited use of cars may cause problems. What are those problems? In order to reduce the problems, should we discourage people to use cars? Give a reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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contemporary world, there have been too many problems

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the irregular

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of cars.

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, increasing air pollution, traffic congestion, and waste of fuel resources have been escalating day by day in order to

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personal

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. In my opinion, we should give limited access to private

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after developing our public transportation systems.

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cars bring multifarious benefits, they

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create too many problems on our planet.

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, these traffic release harmful gases compared to public

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, mostly greenhouse gases, to the atmosphere, which creates global warming

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increasing air pollution.

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, a single person single vehicle creates too much traffic congestion on the road, and

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have to waste their time and energy on the road.

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process, non-renewable oil resources are being depleted as more and more

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are being used.

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, on one bus, there are about 50

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who can travel at a time,

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usually migrate from one place to another using the same fuel. If we can move our

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public

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, more and more energy will be saved.

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reason, as these personal

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bring fewer benefits, so we should create awareness among the

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and understand them about sustainability.

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, local

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is usually cheaper than any other private vehicle.

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, it costs 70 US dollars to

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from Chittagong to Dhaka city in Bangladesh,

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public

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, it is around 7-10 US dollars only. In conclusion, private

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are necessary for any emergency case but in normal times public

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provides an efficient means of travel. As public

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consume less energy than

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, so public awareness is necessary to

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