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The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year, 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year, 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart illustrates the
percentage
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 of
revenue
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 sources and expenditures for a children's charity in the USA in 2016. In terms of
revenue
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 sources, the majority of income came from donated food, accounting for approximately 86.6% of the total
percentage
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.
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 was followed by community contributions at 10.4%, with
program
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revenue
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 at around 2.2%. Investment income and government grants made up the same
percentage
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 about 0.2% each.
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, for other income sources, the figure was only 0.4%.
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, regarding expenditures, the charity's spending was divided into three main areas.
Program
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 services had the highest expenditure
percentage
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 share at 95.8%, reflecting the organization's primary focus. Fundraising costs came next at 2.6%,
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 management and general expenses accounted for the smallest
percentage
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, at 1.6%. In conclusion, the largest
revenue
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 source was donated food at 86.6%,
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 the majority of the
percentage
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 of expenditure went to
program
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 services, demonstrating the charity's focus on direct
program
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 support.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "lastly, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, revenue, program with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
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