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The Pie chart gives information about the country of birth of people living in Australia and the table shows where people born in these countries live. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The Pie chart gives information about the country of birth of people living in Australia and the table shows where people born in these countries live. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart provides information about the country of
birth
 of individuals living in
Australia
whereas
 the table illustrates where these
people
 live in urban or rural
areas
.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 the majority of
people
 who were born in
Australia
 are Australians
while
 the smallest proportion of
people
 born in
Australia
 are from other countries. Another noticeable feature is that foreign nations mostly live in urban
areas
 rather than in rural
areas
. To start with, the most common country in the
birth
 of
people
 is
Australia
 with 73%, underscoring its dominance. Followed by the Netherlands which ranked after
Australia
 with 14%
while
 the share of New Zealander's
birth
 in
Australia
 accounted for half of
Netherlands'
Correct article usage
the Netherlands'
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 figures (7%). Three nations'
birth
 proportions that constituted extremely low percentages under a tiny fraction are British, Chinese, and other nations (3%, 2%, 1%) respectively. In terms of these peoples' living
areas
, the majority of individuals from China, the Netherlands, the UK,
Australia
, and New Zealand live in cities, showing high percentages (99%, 90%,89%, 83%, 80%). In comparison, the share of
people
 from the same countries living in rural
areas
 represented low figures (20%, 17%, 10%, 11%, 1%) respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words birth, australia, people, areas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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