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the bar chart below shows the average children born per womann in 5 countries in 1970 and 2000

the bar chart below shows the average children born per womann in 5 countries in 1970 and 2000
#bar #children #womann #countries
The bar graph illustrates the
birth
 rate in
India
,
Thailand
, Mexico,
Spain
 and Somalia in the
years
 1970 and 2000.
Overall
, the
birth
 rate in
India
 surpassed other countries during the initial year
whereas
,
Spain
 accounted for the least in
both
 given
years
. Significantly, there was a decline in
birth
 rates
of
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Thailand
 and
India
. Apparently,
spain
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Spain
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 had
the
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a
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 consistent
birth
 rate in
both
years
. In later
year
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years
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,
somalia
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Somalia
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 exhibited a moderate climb in
birth
 rates.
According to
 the graph,
India
 had the highest
birth
rates
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rate
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 of just over 5 followed by
Thailand
 with slightly less than 5 in 1970.
However
,
both
 countries
India
 and
Thailand
 noticeably fell to 3 and less than 2 in 2000. Mexico remained unchanged with
value
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a value
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3
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during
both
period
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.
Its
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 clear from the graph,
spain
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Spain
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 declined from 2.8 to 1.3 between the
years
. Markedly ,
somalia
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Somalia
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 took a reverse trend from just over 3 to 3.5
in
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from
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 1970 to 2000.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words birth, india, thailand, spain, years, both with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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