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With the increased global demand for oil and gas, undiscovered areas of the world should be opened up to access more resources. To what extent do you agree?

In recent decades, the surging global demand for
oil
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 and
gas
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 has prompted calls to explore untapped regions of the planet in search of new reserves.
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 some argue that opening up these uncharted areas is a necessary step to meet
energy
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 needs, I strongly disagree with
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 approach. Exploiting untouched environments poses irreversible ecological damage and diverts attention from sustainable
energy
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 solutions that are more viable in the long term. First and foremost, expanding
oil
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 and
gas
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exploration
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 into pristine regions—
such
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 as the Arctic, deep ocean floors, or protected rainforests—poses significant environmental risks. These ecosystems are often fragile, biodiverse, and poorly understood. Drilling in
such
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 areas increases the likelihood of
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 spills, habitat destruction, and long-term ecological imbalance.
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, the Deepwater Horizon disaster in 2010 demonstrated how a single accident can devastate marine ecosystems, with repercussions lasting over a decade. Sacrificing
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 invaluable natural habitats for short-term
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 gain is not only unethical but
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 ecologically unsustainable.
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, investing resources in fossil fuel
exploration
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 detracts from the urgent transition towards renewable
energy
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.
Instead
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 of deepening global dependence on
oil
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 and
gas
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, which are finite and polluting, governments and industries should be accelerating the development of clean technologies
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 as solar, wind, and green hydrogen. Technological advancements and declining costs have already made renewables more accessible than ever before.
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, countries like Denmark and Costa Rica have successfully integrated high percentages of renewables into their
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 grids, proving that a low-carbon future is both realistic and achievable. Continuing to search for fossil fuels in unexplored regions undermines
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 progress and delays the shift towards
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 sustainability. Admittedly, proponents of
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exploration
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 argue that it is necessary to ensure
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 security and economic growth, especially in countries heavily reliant on
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 exports.
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,
this
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 viewpoint overlooks the volatility of fossil fuel markets and the growing geopolitical and financial risks associated with
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 dependency.
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, renewable
energy
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 sources offer not only environmental resilience but
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 long-term economic stability and job creation across sectors. In conclusion, opening undiscovered areas of the world for
oil
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 and
gas
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exploration
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 is a regressive and environmentally harmful strategy. Rather than repeating past mistakes, global efforts should focus on accelerating the transition to clean, renewable
energy
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 sources that promise a more secure and sustainable future.

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strength
Your view is clear from the start. Keep this clear all through the essay.
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Open with your main reason and plan so the reader knows where you go.
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Give stronger proof for each point when you can, even small facts or clear links.
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Keep words simple and short. This helps the exam check your work.
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End with a strong closing line that looks ahead to what we can do next.
stance
Clear view against opening new areas.
coherence
Uses linking words well to move ideas.
evidence
Gives examples to back up points.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global demand
  • finite resources
  • energy consumption
  • exploiting
  • untouched ecosystems
  • carbon emissions
  • climate change
  • renewable energy
  • sustainable energy solutions
  • geopolitical consequences
  • territorial disputes
  • dependency
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