The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

The line chart illustrates the trends in participation
for
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in
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5 particular activities (film club, martial arts, amateur dramatics,
table
tennis
, musical performances) in an unspecified social centre in Melbourne, Australia over the first two decades of the 20th century.
Overall
,
film city
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Film City
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had the highest engagement levels during the given period.
Moreover
, activities like musical performances and
table
tennis
rose in popularity towards the
later
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latter
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half of the time frame with
table
tennis
making a surge post the first decade and enrollment in musicals increasing gradually before levelling off in the
last
5 years.
On the other hand
, amateur dramatics witnessed a significant decline in its engagement levels making it the least opted activity by the end of the given duration,
whereas
martial arts remained at a relatively stable position with less drastic fluctuations. In 2000,
film
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the film
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club had about 65 participants, and by 2010,
this
figure dipped slightly to just over 60 before gradually rising back to around 65 by 2020. Interestingly, participation in musicals only gained interest in 2005, before which there were no partakers.
This
number rose from 0 to around 15 by 2010 after which it increased only marginally to just over 25 in 2020.
In contrast
,
table
tennis
showed a gradual demand in the initial period with little over 15 in 2000 to just about 20 enrolments in 2005, post which it remained steady for a year before making a steep climb to over 50 in 2020. Contrarily, beginner dramatics showed an insignificant increase from approx. 25 to just under 30 by 2005, post which it took a sharp turn and slumped to merely 5-6 members by 2020.
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  • participants
  • social centre
  • comparison
  • trends
  • consistently popular
  • gained popularity
  • lost popularity
  • community interest
  • availability of facilities
  • social factors
  • economic factors
  • external events
  • economic downturns
  • health crises
  • demographic changes
  • aging population
  • marketing
  • community outreach programs
  • participation rates
  • Melbourne
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