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The graph below shows the average house prices in 3 countries between the years 1997-2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average house prices in 3 countries between the years 1997-2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates how the average housing
costs
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 change in 3 countries from 1997 to 2014.
Overall
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, it is evident that
house
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 prices experienced an upward trend in all 3 countries over the period given.
Furthermore
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, in
country
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B
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, and
country
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 A,
costs
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 increased
dramaticaly
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dramatically
, though changes in the
accomadation
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accommodation
 prices observed a gradual increase in
country
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C
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. Looking in more detail, the
house
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 fee in
the
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apply
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Country
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 A was
the
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higher compared to other countries in 1997, with $100K.
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, these patterns commenced in around
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$90k,
both
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in both
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country
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countries
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B
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 and
C
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.
However
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,
this
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 figure for
the
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apply
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Country
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B
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 increased sharply to just above $250k by 2001, and the
accomadation
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accommodation
costs
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 in
Country
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 A and
Country
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C
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 grew slightly
around
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to around
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 $120k, respectively.
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, the
house
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 cost in
Country
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 A experienced a significant growth
about
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of about
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 $510K by 2003.
Likewise
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 past
trend
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trends
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, the residence values in
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country
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countries
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B
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 and
C
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 improved to $300k and $200k,
resptively
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respectively
. Regarding other changes, the
house
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 fees in
Country
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 A fluctuated by 2010,
remained
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and remained
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 at $600K.
In addition
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,
this
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 figure for town
B
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 increased
significanly
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significantly
 to around $500K in 2009, before a minor decline in 2008 and it increased
roughly
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by roughly
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 $500k. Meanwhile, the
accomadation
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accommodation
costs
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 for
Country
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C
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 experienced a gradual increase
at the end
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 of the
perid
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period
 to almost $250k.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words costs, house, country, b, c, k with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average house prices
  • significant trend
  • fluctuations
  • comparison
  • peak
  • lowest point
  • steady period
  • economic factors
  • political factors
  • historical context
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • noticeable fluctuations
  • major changes
  • given period
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