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Living in a country where you have to speak in a foreign language can cause serious social problems as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Do you have difficulty writing a to what extent do you agree or disagree essay?

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There is no denying the fact that living in a
country
 where we have to speak
in
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a foreign
language
 can cause social
problems
.
while
 is a commonly held
that
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believe
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belief
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 that speaking in another
language
 will cause social
problems
as well as
 practical
problems
.There is
also
 an argument that
opposes
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opposes this
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.In my
opinion
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opinion,
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i
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I
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 consider that
as
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a
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language
 barrier problem.
To begin
 with ,when you come to a new
country
 you need to know more about their
language
 , culture and how they speak with foreigners.
In other words
, before you reach
this
country
 read and know more about
languages
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the languages
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 used so if you know one of these
languages
 you can give it a start.In
additions
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, you
need
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 start learning simple words or sentences so you can communicate with
people
 in
this
country
 to reduce the social
problems
. Another point to consider,
if
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 they accept
people
 who are not speaking
with
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their
language
 as
this
 may happen in some countries.It is possible to say that they don't like
people
 who
speaks
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in
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different
languages
. In
coclusion
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conclusion
,despite
people
 having different views ,
i
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 believe that
language
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the language
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 barrier
cause
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causes
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mis-understanding
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misunderstanding
 for many
people
 and
this
 can be solved if
people
 are learning new
languages
 to stretch their knowledge.
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Coherence
Work on improving the logical flow between your paragraphs. Each paragraph should follow naturally from the one before, ensuring a clear progression of ideas.
Task Achievement
Develop your main points with clearer examples and explanations. Use relevant and specific examples to support your arguments more effectively.
Cohesion
Avoid repetition of ideas such as the language barrier causing misunderstandings.
Coherence and Cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present and clearly outline your main position regarding the language barrier issue.
Task Achievement
There is a good understanding of the topic, and you have expressed your opinion about the impact of foreign language on social and practical problems.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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