The diagram below displays the life cycle of a lady bird and its anatomy. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below displays the life cycle of a lady bird and its anatomy.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagrams illustrate the life cycle of a
ladybug
as well as
the anatomical structure it contains.
Overall
, from the egg
stage
to being adult, there are four main stages in the life span of a
ladybug
and as for anatomy, it contains structures more or less similar to the other arthropods
except
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a few special appearances.
However
, The life cycle of
ladybug
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starts from the eggs which
last
for 2 to 5 days and
then
the larval
stage
comes. At
this
period, the larval
stage
lasts for about 21 days, during which the cylindrical-shaped larva grows,
and
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after that, the larva gets encircled with a structure by itself, forms a cocoon and enters into the pupa
stage
.
This
pupa clings to a leaf and
this
period lasts for 7 days until an adult
ladybug
comes out of the cocoon.
On the other hand
, like other arthropods, the whole structure of
ladybug
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can be divided into head and body regions. The head part contains eyes, a special body part called a pronotum and antennae at
the
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both sides of the head. Meanwhile, the body region
is consisted
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with
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legs, wings, and an abdomen.
Lastly
, The ladybird’s wings are bright red with distinctive black spots.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words ladybug, stage with synonyms.
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