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Band 2.5

The best way to make the road transport of goods safer is to ask drivers to take a driving test each year. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#road #transport #goods #drivers #test #year
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It is argued that
,
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 it is
sgnificant
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significant
 to
requier
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require
 people to take
driving
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test
 every year because that will help to protect the goods when it is
transprted
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transported
. I totally agree with
this
 statement
due to
 many
reasones
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reasons
.
One
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one
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 hand, the
road
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roads
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 in all countries around the world have
change
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 constantly.
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, in my hometown the
road
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last
 month because the
road
 was
destory
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destroyed
 when the rain came and
government
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the government
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try
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 to search for another place to make a new
road
. So, when people take a driving
test
 they will know about the
knew
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 roads. On another hand,
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an individual
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individual
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individuals
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 are facing some teruibeels and health problems and they
don't
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won't
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be
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 attention
for
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 that
however
 when they do a driving
test
 they will
make
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take
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 a medical
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check
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 and they will know if they have problems
prevent
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preventing
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him
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them
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 from driving. For
insent
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insert
instant
, older people may have
problem
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problems
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 with their eyes or
bloode
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blood
bloody
prusser
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presser
pressure
 and that will
make
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a serious problems
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serious problems
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 when they drive. In conclusion, to make the
road
 transport
og
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of
 goods more safer we should follow all
road
 rules and do
driving
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a driving
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test
 each year to ensure pace for all users and goods.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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