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The bar chart shows the scores of teams A, B and C over four different seasons. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the scores of teams A, B and C over four different seasons. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph demonstrates the
points
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 scored by three teams( A,
B
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 and
C
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) during various
seasons
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encompossing
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encompassing
 2002, 2003, 2004 and 2005. Units are measured in
points
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.
Overall
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,
Team
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B
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 won the activity with a large margin
throught
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through
throughout
 the given period. Significantly,
Team
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C
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 garnered
comparatively
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a comparatively
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less
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lower
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 score. Noticeably,
Team
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 A
was securing
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secured
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third
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position
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 in the initial years
jumped
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and jumped
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 to second
position
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 in the final two
seasons
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.
According to
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 the graph, in 2002,
Team
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B
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became
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came
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 first by earning 82
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whereas
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Team
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C
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 and
Team
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 A took second and
third
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position
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positions
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 by 10 and 5
points
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, respectively. In
an
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another season of 2003,
Team
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B
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 scored the highest point of 60 followed by
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C
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 and
Team
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 A by 15 and 11
points
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. In every
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seasons
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season
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,
Team
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B
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 secured its first place by 43
points
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 in 2004 and 55 pts in 2005.
In contrast
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,
Team
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 A exhibited an upward trend by jumping from
third
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position
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 to second
position
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 by 35
points
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 and 8
points
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 in 2004 and 2005.
However
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,
Team
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C
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 fell to
the
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third
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 place by 12
points
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 and 5
points
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 in the
last
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 two
seasons
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.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words points, b, c, seasons, team, third, position with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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