We cannot help everyone in the world that needs help, so we should only be concerned with our own communities and countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Since helping everyone and solving all
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are unattainable, it is suggested to solely focus on
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within
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's community.
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I acknowledge the reasons based on which
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mentality is formed, I do not reckon
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would be the ideal approach. On the
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hand, there are several reasons why people do not have a fondness to allocate their financial resources to global
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.
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, people pay taxes and collaborate in the country's revenue generation;
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, they are entitled to profit from these financial resources.
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means that governments have to prioritize national
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over international ones.
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, just because these actions are labelled global help, does not mean to say nations are exclusively providing resources to tackle pressing
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. The history of slavery is an exemplary example of nations that were supposed to help other people but exploited
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chance and swindled local societies with inadequate money to work in their favour.
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, working with other communities can bring about significant benefits to both individuals and the whole globe. Regarding individuals, by
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to other countries as a means of cooperating in community services,
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can learn about other cultures, customs, and heritage.
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can help them to cement a meaningful relationship with different walks of life, ultimately cultivating the seed of empathy among societies.
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, local
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usually go a long way toward causing a global issue.
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, it is better to provide sources from all around the world in order to prevent these setbacks from
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up. Take rainforests
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, lodging and overgrazing, which caused the extinction of these vegetation, were not once considered to have detrimental effects on other communities.
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, nowadays, constant concern about pollution and Eath's heightened temperature is proven to have a positive correlation with these previous exploitations. In conclusion,
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focusing on the
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of
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's nation may seem more appealing at
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the long-term consequences of
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necessitate individuals to work collectively, and require a global collaboration for
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to be addressed.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global interconnectivity
  • international cooperation
  • ethics
  • moral obligation
  • geographical borders
  • diplomatic relations
  • economic stability
  • global security
  • resource allocation
  • expertise
  • international aid
  • dependency and development
  • sustainable solutions
  • local and global initiatives
  • community resilience
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