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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart shows the scores of teams A, B and C over four different seasons. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart shows the scores of teams A, B and C over four different seasons. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
#minutes #bar #scores #teams #b #c #four #seasons #information #features #comparisons
The chart above provides
infomation
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information
 about
scores
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the scores
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 of three different teams between 2002 and 2005.
Overall
,
team
 B had higher points than the other two teams during for seasons of games
however
, it experienced fluctuation throughout the period.
Moreover
,
team
 A witnessed
rapid
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a rapid
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 increase in
year
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the year
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 2004 in ratio to other seasons. The score of
team
 B
srarted
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started
 at about 82
point
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points
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 in 2002 and
decrease
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decreased
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gradualy
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gradually
 until it hit the low bottom in 2004 with 43
point
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points
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.
at the end
 of the
period
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period,
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 it increased slightly and reached
to
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apply
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55
point
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points
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.
While
 the line chart shows sharp changes for
team
A
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A's
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 scores,
team
 c mostly stayed steady and
shows
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showed
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 little changes over the period from 2002 to 2005.The highest score of
team
 C was 15
point
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points
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 in 2003 and the lowest score was 5
point
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points
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 in 2005.
Team
 A's
point
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points
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rise
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rose
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signidicantly
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significantly
 in 2004 to 35
point
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points
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 and
then
it
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they
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 dropped by 7 times and hit 5
point
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points
show examples
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words team, point with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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