The bar chart shows the scores of teams A, B and C over four different seasons. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart above provides

infomation

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information

about

scores

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the scores

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of three different teams between 2002 and 2005.

Overall

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team

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B had higher points than the other two teams during for seasons of games

however

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, it experienced fluctuation throughout the period.

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team

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A witnessed

rapid

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a rapid

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increase in

year

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the year

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2004 in ratio to other seasons. The score of

team

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srarted

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started

at about 82

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point

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points

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in 2002 and

decrease

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decreased

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gradualy

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gradually

until it hit the low bottom in 2004 with 43

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point

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points

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at the end

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of the

period

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period,

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it increased slightly and reached

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apply

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point

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points

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While

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the line chart shows sharp changes for

team

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A's

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scores,

team

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c mostly stayed steady and

shows

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showed

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little changes over the period from 2002 to 2005.The highest score of

team

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C was 15

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point

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points

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in 2003 and the lowest score was 5

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point

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points

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in 2005.

Team

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A's

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point

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points

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rise

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rose

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signidicantly

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significantly

in 2004 to 35

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point

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points

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and

then

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they

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dropped by 7 times and hit 5

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point

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points

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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