Some people believe that sports competition are a source of emotional stress for young people. Therefore youth should be banned from participating in sports competition. Do you agree or disagree?

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role In our
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a
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different popular
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one country to another ,and it is even developed
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sports
competitions locally or worldwide . Any type of
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a high levels
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of stress and
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for the athlete or the
sports
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diffirant
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different
ages , for more experienced
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athlete
they already used to
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anything
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body or mental health and
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young
athlet
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athletes
who
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or
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competition
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competitions
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should have the same care as professionals athlete , they need psychological sessions to
relive
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stress and
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focused
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goals . To
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in
sports
competitions it should not be a
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difference
between professionals and
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young athletes
, actually
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they need to have the same care and attention and
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equal
right to
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compete
at any age if the individual got talents.
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Task Achievement
Make sure to give a clear statement of your stance, introducing whether you agree or disagree in the introduction.
Task Achievement
Include specific and relevant examples to support your ideas and arguments.
Coherence and Cohesion
Try to structure the essay logically, with clear paragraphs that each cover a specific point.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure your ideas flow smoothly from one to the next, using linking words or phrases.
Task Achievement
You addressed the topic and included specific points about stress levels in sports.
Coherence and Cohesion
The introduction provides a general context about the importance of sports and their global presence.
Task Achievement
You acknowledged emotional stress as a concern in sports competitions.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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