Some people believe that sports competition are a source of emotional stress for young people. Therefore youth should be banned from participating in sports competition. Do you agree or disagree?

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imported

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role In our

every day

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lives and there

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diffirant populre

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different popular

sports

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frome

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from

one country to another ,and it is even developed

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sports

competitions locally or worldwide . Any type of

competitions

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a high levels

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a high level

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of stress and

excited

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for the athlete or the

sports

fans

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diffirant

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different

ages , for more experienced

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athlete

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environments

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anything

dameging

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damaging

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body or mental health and

on the other hand

they have professionals to

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them . There

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young

athlet

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athlete

athletes

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compet

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compete

competed

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scholarship

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scholarships

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competent

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for college

competition

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competitions

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should have the same care as professionals athlete , they need psychological sessions to

relive

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relieve

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stress and

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focused

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there

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goals . To

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sports

competitions it should not be a

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difference

between professionals and

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young athletes

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they need to have the same care and attention and

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equal

right to

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compete

at any age if the individual got talents.

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Task Achievement

Make sure to give a clear statement of your stance, introducing whether you agree or disagree in the introduction.

Task Achievement

Include specific and relevant examples to support your ideas and arguments.

Coherence and Cohesion

Try to structure the essay logically, with clear paragraphs that each cover a specific point.

Coherence and Cohesion

Ensure your ideas flow smoothly from one to the next, using linking words or phrases.

Task Achievement

You addressed the topic and included specific points about stress levels in sports.

Coherence and Cohesion

The introduction provides a general context about the importance of sports and their global presence.

Task Achievement

You acknowledged emotional stress as a concern in sports competitions.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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2Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
34Grammar mistakes
 

2 paragraphs

177 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Some people believe that sports competition are a source of emotional stress for young people. Therefore youth should be banned from participating in sports competition. Do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

Many people today are worried about the large quantities of waste produced by ordinary households. What problems are caused by household waste, and what solutions may be possible in both the short and the long term?

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In many countries today, if people want to find work, they have to move away from their friends and families. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

In many countries, children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility.

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