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The maps illustrate an industrial area in Norbiton in the present day compared with plans for future development of the site.

The maps illustrate an industrial area in Norbiton in the present day compared with plans for future development of the site.
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The given map depicts an
opportunities
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 space in the
town
 of Norbiton and
predicted
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about
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facilities in the future.
Overall
, it
remarkable
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 that
it
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there
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 has been
a
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considerable development of the
town
 in infrastructure, housing, and facilities. The noticeable feature is that more habitations
were add
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were added
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for
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 cope with
huge
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the huge
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 population. As can be seen
in
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 the map, farmland was relocated
in
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 the East
side
 of
town
. Factories were demolished and replaced with housing
for
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 improve
well being
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 in
town
.
Playground
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 was reconstructed between two housing near the
river
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riverside
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side
.
Moreover
,
School
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a School
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 was
builded
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built
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 in the East of
town
for
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to
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 promote academic education to
parent
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parents
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 and children.
According to
 the map,
medical
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a medical
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 centre was added in the corner of
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center
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centre
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 area.
Shop
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 was reconstructed
in
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on
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 the opposite
side
 of
medical
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the medical
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 centre
for
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 collect more
budgets
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 to modernize the better communities.
As well as
 factors were
destroved
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destroyed
 and replace to
new
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the new
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 shelter.
Lastly
, the roads
in
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 the West
side
 of the
town
 were added for transport convenient
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words town, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.
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