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The chart below shows information about changes in average house prices in five different cities between 1990 and 2002 compared with the average house prices in 1989. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows information about changes in average house prices in five different cities between 1990 and 2002 compared with the average house prices in 1989. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of average
changes
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 in
house
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 costs in New York, Madrid, Tokyo, Frankfurt and
London
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 from 1990 to 2002 compared with the average change in 1989.
Overall
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, in the first five
years
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 the
percentage
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 of
changes
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 in
house
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 prices decreased dramatically .
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, in the
last
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 five years increased significantly.
London
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 has the highest
percentage
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 of
changes
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 in
house
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 prices. The
percentage
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 change from 1990 to 1995, in New York, Tokyo and
London
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 dropped significantly nearly -5% and -6% for both respectively.
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 in Madrid and Frankfurt increased slightly to 2% and 3% respectively. From 1996 to 2002 the average proportion of
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changes
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change
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 costs of houses in
London
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 increased dramatically to over 10 per cent. Meanwhile, houses in New York and Madrid increased significantly to 5% and 4%. The
percentage
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 change in
house
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 prices in Tokyo
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 grew slightly to only -5%. Whilst in Frankfurter dropped slightly to only 2 per cent.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words changes, house, london, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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