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Nowadays more and more children are being brought up in single-parent families. What are the causes of this? What effects can be seen as a result of this?

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In present days, raising
children
 with a single parent has become more common than before;
however
,
this
 phenomenon has negative impacts on
kids
. From my perspective, I believe that the major reason for
this
 situation is the disagreement between
parents
, which causes many
issues
.
As a result
, it could affect a child’s personality
as well as
 their
behaviors
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,
whereas
 it is known that
parents
 are the first school for their
children
.
This
 essay will show some reasons for
this
 situation and the signs that might be affecting the child. To start with, disputes between
parents
 play a vital role in destroying
kids
' futures.
In other words
,
parents
 are the models for their
kids
,
however
, if the relationship between them is full of
issues
, tragedies, and disagreements as well, they will certainly notice changes in their
kids
'
behaviors
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 and personalities.
For example
, many schools are suffering from numerous problems among
children
, when they did research with some psychologists, they found that the main reason for
this
 phenomenon is the majority of students suffer from
issues
 with their
parents
. A lack of compassion and empathy from
parents
 for their
kids
 will totally affect their mental health. It is
also
 possible to say that, many
kids
 struggle with negative energy, which they cannot express since their roots and origins are built with
issues
.
In addition
, their manners in dealing with their friends will worsen over time, since every child needs to be raised by their mothers, and fathers. Each parent has their own way of raising their
children
. In conclusion, both mothers and fathers have a great impact on babies, and both of them are important as they play a vital role in enhancing their personalities.
However
, babies are not a game, so
parents
 should be aware of
this
 point when choosing their life partner, with full awareness and consciousness.
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task achievement
Expand on specific examples and include data or statistics to support points, such as divorce rates or studies on the impact of single-parenting.
coherence cohesion
Improve organization by expanding on points clearly in separate paragraphs and use linking words to guide the reader through the argument.
task achievement
The introduction clearly lays out the topic and your perspective, setting a direction for the essay.
coherence cohesion
Logical flow from introduction to conclusion, making it easy to follow the writer's main ideas.
coherence cohesion
Conclusion reinforces the main idea and includes a reflective note, encouraging a responsible perspective.

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