Many of the world’s cities are currently facing a serious problem of housing shortage. What are the reasons for this shortage and what solutions do you suggest?
It is true that poverty become an important issue around the world. The number of
people
who do not have a Use synonyms
house
is higher than others. There are some reasons and solutions to cover Use synonyms
this
problem.
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One
reason behind the housing shortage is Use synonyms
because
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apply
land
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price
. The government did not have strong power to make a rule for Use synonyms
this
problem. Linking Words
As a result
, Linking Words
people
who have a lot of money can buy Use synonyms
property
without any Use synonyms
bound
. They will change the standard Correct your spelling
bond
price
to higher based on the location Use synonyms
as
they want. Correct word choice
apply
Moreover
, they will become a landlord in every place with high cost in Linking Words
rent
. Use synonyms
Hence
, poor Linking Words
people
will difficult to have a Use synonyms
house
with Use synonyms
the
Correct article usage
a
price
that they cannot buy for the Use synonyms
land
. For other reasons is because young Use synonyms
people
now never have a plan to buy a Use synonyms
house
for their future. They prefer to Use synonyms
rent
an apartment or live with their parents since they do not need to pay for Use synonyms
living
. Correct article usage
a living
Nevertheless
, Linking Words
this
problem can make them difficult in older age. They need to share a Linking Words
house
with their siblings or other families in Use synonyms
one
Use synonyms
house
and it can make unhealthy life in living. They think having a Use synonyms
house
is not Use synonyms
top
priority for their Add an article
the top
a top
live
. Replace the word
lives
Also
, they think by Linking Words
Use synonyms
rent
an apartment they can Change the verb form
renting
living in
downtown with Wrong verb form
live
low
cost Correct word choice
a lower
that
having a Correct word choice
than
house
in the same place. Use synonyms
Wheras
, they can save more many Correct your spelling
Whereas
year
by year not by paying for the Change to a plural noun
years
rent
but for Use synonyms
installment
for Change the spelling
instalment
Use synonyms
Add an article
a house
the house
house
that can be private Fix the agreement mistake
houses
property
for them.
The solution, Use synonyms
government
should make strong Add an article
the government
law
Fix the agreement mistake
laws
to
citizens to Change preposition
for
ownership in
Wrong verb form
own
property
. They need to make borders in landlord or Use synonyms
property
having. Use synonyms
Moreover
, they need to make a limit on the Linking Words
price
from Use synonyms
one
location to another location, and Use synonyms
also
limit for costs that must spent by Linking Words
people
. Use synonyms
For example
, Linking Words
one
person only can buy Use synonyms
one
Use synonyms
land
in downtown and only can build Use synonyms
Use synonyms
house
based on Add an article
a house
number
Add an article
the number
for
their children. If they want to buy more they can buy in urban Change preposition
of
area
with size limitations based on the purpose of the Fix the agreement mistake
areas
land
. Another solutionUse synonyms
,
is the young generations now need to have socialisation to have a Remove the comma
apply
house
by themself it is because a Use synonyms
house
is an important thing to have not only for them but Use synonyms
also
for their children of for their future.
In conclusion, Linking Words
house
shortage can be faced by Use synonyms
people
not only by the government. Both sectors need to learn based on the problems that happened before. Citizens Use synonyms
also
need to have initiative Linking Words
to
themself by having Change preposition
apply
land
and building houses for them to live. They can move and live alone when they grow up so they can have more responsibility for their life.Use synonyms
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