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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The maps illustrate the layout changes of road access to a
City
 Hospital between 2007 and 2010.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 there
is
Wrong verb form
was
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 an addition of some road features in 2010 that didn't exist before in 2007, one of them is
an
Correct article usage
the
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 addition of the roundabouts located
in
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on
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 the two
corner
Change to a plural noun
corners
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 of
the
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apply
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Hospital Street, and the rest of them are the
relocate
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relocated
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 of bus station and
car
park
. In 2007, the bus stop
is
Wrong verb form
was
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 located on the edge of Hospital Rd with a
car
park
 on the left side. The old
car
park
 was built to
accomodated
Correct your spelling
accommodate
accommodated
staff
Correct article usage
the staff
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 of the
City
 Hospital
as well as
 the visitors. Meanwhile, in 2010, there
are
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were
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significantly
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significant
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 changes
of
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in
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 the layout. We now have two roundabouts located at the North
center
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centre
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 and the South
center
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centre
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 of
the
Correct article usage
apply
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Hospital Street, and the bus stop now has a station located at the West side of Hospital Road (at the Southwest of the
City
 Hospital).
Moreover
, they now
seperate
Correct your spelling
separate
operate
 the
car
park
,
for
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so
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 the staff remain in the same area as before,
while
 the public should
park
 their
car
 to the East of the
City
 Hospital.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, car, park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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