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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The maps illustrate the layout changes of road access to a
City
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 Hospital between 2007 and 2010.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 there
is
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was
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 an addition of some road features in 2010 that didn't exist before in 2007, one of them is
an
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the
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 addition of the roundabouts located
in
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on
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 the two
corner
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corners
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 of
the
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apply
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Hospital Street, and the rest of them are the
relocate
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relocated
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 of bus station and
car
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park
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. In 2007, the bus stop
is
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was
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 located on the edge of Hospital Rd with a
car
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park
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 on the left side. The old
car
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park
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 was built to
accomodated
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accommodate
accommodated
staff
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the staff
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 of the
City
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 Hospital
as well as
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 the visitors. Meanwhile, in 2010, there
are
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were
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significantly
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significant
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 changes
of
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in
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 the layout. We now have two roundabouts located at the North
center
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centre
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 and the South
center
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centre
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 of
the
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apply
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Hospital Street, and the bus stop now has a station located at the West side of Hospital Road (at the Southwest of the
City
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 Hospital).
Moreover
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, they now
seperate
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separate
operate
 the
car
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park
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,
for
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so
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 the staff remain in the same area as before,
while
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 the public should
park
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 their
car
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 to the East of the
City
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 Hospital.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, car, park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic flow
  • road access
  • ring road
  • bus stops
  • bus station
  • congestion
  • parking facilities
  • pedestrian crossings
  • vehicular flow
  • organizational structure
  • accessibility
  • enhancements
  • configuration
  • dedicated
  • diverting traffic
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