The graph gives information about male and female gym membership between 1980 and 2010 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The line graph compares information about male and female
the
gym Correct article usage
apply
membership
between 1980 and 2010. The graphic has in
the vertical axis the number of Change preposition
on
membership
and Replace the word
members
in
the horizontal axis are the years with Change preposition
on
five
Correct determiner usage
a
years
gap.
At first sight, in 1980 male Correct your spelling
five-year
memeberships
were double than the female Correct your spelling
memberships
membership
membership
, since
1980 until 1985 Change preposition
from
men
Correct your spelling
male
subsriptions
had a Correct your spelling
subscriptions
rapidly
Change the word
rapid
increase
almost Wrong verb form
increased
the
double from the beginning the Correct article usage
apply
females
Fix the agreement mistake
female
membership
grew gradually. Then
, the men
line has considerably fallen from 1987 to 1993 Change noun form
men's
where
it had Correct word choice
when
less
memberships in front of the beginning and that Change the quantifier
fewer
tendece
stays until almost 1997 Correct your spelling
tendency
tended
where
the line started to grow significantly until 2005, Correct word choice
when
where
the memberships Correct word choice
when
had
Unnecessary verb
apply
a
dramatically Correct article usage
apply
plummet
Wrong verb form
plummeted
under
Change preposition
to under
the
one thousand in 2010.
Correct article usage
apply
On the other hand
, the women had a modestly grew
in the period with fluctuation in Replace the word
modest growth
differents
moments. The highest growth was between 1990 and 1995 in which case for 2010 it has more than the beginning.
Correct your spelling
different
To conclude
the
Correct article usage
apply
women
Change noun form
women's
memebership
had a Correct your spelling
membership
gently
growth but, men had a lot of fluctuation and the Change the adverb
gentle
last
years of analysis
showed a Add an article
the analysis
wildly
decrease.Change the adverb
wild
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