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The graph below shows the number of car manufactured from 2020 to 2035.

The graph below shows the number of car manufactured from 2020 to 2035.
The line chart illustrates how many
cars
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 were and will be produced in
China
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, the UK,
Japan
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, and the
USA
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 from 2020 to 2035.
Overall
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, the number of
cars
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 manufactured in
China
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 is forecast to have an upward trend,
while
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 the opposite is true for the UK,
Japan
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, and the
USA
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. Throughout the period,
Japan
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 is believed to make the most
cars
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, except for the year 2035.
Japan
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 took the lead in the car industry among
four
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 countries,
while
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China
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 started with the lowest figure for
cars
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. In detail, about 350,000
cars
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 were produced in
Japan
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 in 2020, after which it is expected to go up slightly to about 370,000
cars
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 five
years
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 later,
then
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 it will plummet to just 100,000 in 2035.
In contrast
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,
China
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 made about 100,000
cars
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 in the first
years
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 of the period, followed by a gradual rise to about 150,000
cars
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 after 15
years
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, exceeding that of
Japan
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. The UK and the
USA
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 will both experience a downward trend in the figure for
cars
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,
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 but to varying extents. Specifically, beginning with 300 thousand
cars
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 made in 2020, the
USA
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 is predicted to cut down on the number of
cars
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 manufactured 15
years
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 later,
at
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to
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 just 10,000
cars
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.
Similarly
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, the car industry in Britain produced just 200,000
cars
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, with a prediction of a moderate decrease to about 20 thousand
cars
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 over a 15-year period.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cars, china, japan, usa, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Manufacturing output
  • Production trend
  • Significant peak
  • Notable decline
  • Fluctuation
  • Technological advancements
  • Economic challenges
  • Consumer demand
  • Sustainability
  • Government regulation
  • Predictive analysis
  • Market dynamics
  • Environmental impact
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