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The table below shows information about metro systems in six different cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows information about metro systems in six different cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided table depicts information about
underground
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the underground
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 system in six cities divided by how much
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Lines
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, Total length, Annual journeys, and the price of each ticket. In general,
New
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the New
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 York
City
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Subway
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 has the most
lines
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 and total length of all.
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, the most annual journeys recorded in Beijing
Subway
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, and London Tube has the highest price for each ticket. The underground system
in
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New
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the New
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 York
City
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Subway
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 has 24
lines
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, twice more number
than
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of
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 in Mexico
City
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 Metro. But the the
least
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last
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 line is in
London
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the London
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 Tube with a slight
1
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1-line
lines
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 difference.
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 with
New
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the New
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 York
City
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Subway
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,
Paris
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the Paris
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 Metro has the shortest underground length at 127 miles, The number of
journey
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journeys
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 made in a year is at its highest in Beijing
Subway
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 with
total
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a total
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3.6
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of 3.6
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billions
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billion
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, followed by Tokyo
Subway
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 with a
half billions
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half-billion
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 disparity (3.1
billions
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billion
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), with 1.64 US Dollars for a single ticket.
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 is still far cheaper than in London Tube with around quadrupple more expensive (at 7.30 dollars).
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Vocabulary: Replace the words lines, city, subway with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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