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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Your friend is thinking about learning to drive and would like some advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • say why a driving licence is advantageous • recommend a driving school • give any extra guidance/tips You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear..., You should write at least 150 words.

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Dear Maninder, I hope
this
 letter finds you in the best of spirits and radiant health. I am writing
this
 letter in context to your decision about learn driving. First and foremost, the
drivers
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driver's
drivers'
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 licence is the most important document, which you must have before joining a driving school. These days, authorities are very strict about it, especially, after the recent changes in the laws introduced by the Central Ministry on Road Safety. In order to, learn
driving
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to drive
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 I would like to give you a few suggestions. There is a driving school in Ludhiana by the name of Classic Motor Driving School. They offer practical
as well as
 theory classes on driving.
Moreover
, their staff is very co-operative and professional with the beginners. I
also
 learned
driving
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to drive
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 from them back in 2005.
Besides
it
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that
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, I would like to give you a few useful practical tips from my personal experience before you start driving.
Firstly
, always give
indicator
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an indicator
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 before making a turn.
Secondly
, always avoid over-speeding.
Lastly
, always try to drive
according to
 the road safety signs. I hope
this
 information is useful to you and I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours lovingly, Jatinder.
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coherence cohesion
Although the letter is mostly clear, breaking down longer sentences into shorter ones can improve clarity.
task achievement
Include more context or examples to enhance the depth of your points, particularly regarding the advantages of holding a driving license.
coherence cohesion
The letter has a warm and friendly greeting and closing, suitable for a letter to a friend.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is personal and supportive, which is well-suited to the informal nature of the task.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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