The table shows the percent of undergraduate students studying selected subject in three different countries.

The table shows the percent of undergraduate students studying selected subject in three different countries.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The table shows the percent of undergraduate students studying selected subject in three different countries.
The table chart illustrates the proportion of
subjects
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to which undergraduate
students
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from three countries apply.The figure is given in percentage.
Overall
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,it can be seen that the majority of
subjects
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that German and Korean
students
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choose is Engineering
whereas
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,most
students
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in the
USA
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prefer business.
To begin
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with,The
USA
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students
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select business the most ,which is just under a fourth.Business is
also
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the second most applied subject in Germany,occupying 18.1%
while
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none of the
students
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in Korea apply for
this
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. In Korea,
students
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tend to select Engineering as their top selected subject ,at just over 20% ,which is
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the
the
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most selected subject in Germany at just under 20%.
On the other hand
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,only 5.6% of
students
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in the
USA
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select
this
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. The other
subjects
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have lower selection rates which are under 15% in three countries consisting of Education,Psychology,Biology/Biomedical
science
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,English language/literature,and Foreign language/literature in the
USA
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. Moving on to Korean
students
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,the
subjects
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that are chosen less than 15% are Law,Foreign languages,Fine arts and design,Political
science
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,Psychology,and Medical
science
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.
Lastly
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,German
students
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seem less select Foreign languages,international law,education,psychology and sports
science
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.All of these
subjects
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are less than 15%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words subjects, students, usa, science with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • undergraduate students
  • selected subjects
  • enrollment
  • popular
  • variations
  • trends
  • cultural factors
  • educational factors
  • implications
  • economies
  • job markets
  • education policy
  • industry needs
  • international competitiveness
  • alignment
  • gap
  • global market
  • enrollment figures
  • academic discipline
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