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In the future, all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people traveling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is expected that in the near
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 almost all vehicles will be on autopilot and the only humans inside will be passengers.
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 there might be some drawbacks, I believe the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. The main benefit of
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 technology would be fewer operator-related
accidents
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 than past These vehicles are equipped with numerous sensors that network with each other and connect to a control centre, resulting in very few
accidents
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. In comparison to human
drivers
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 who are susceptible to many natural unwanted errors
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 exhaustion or lack of skills these AI-powered vehicles are significantly superior.
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, we can appreciate less flight-related
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 because of auto-pilot technology already. There will be
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 no need for experienced and skilled
drivers
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 who need prolonged training and supervised experiences.
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 helps address the chronic lack of professional operators, a concern that has consistently troubled governments. It saves a significant amount of budget for public services in order to be spent on other matters.
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, the extra money could be spent on developing public transport infrastructures and paying individuals who control
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 system. These vehicle operators might be worried about losing the only job they are trained for.
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, travellers inside might feel insecure and abandoned when no conventional driver exists to be in contact with. It should be refuted because these jobless
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 could be used in positions like controlling room and helping to transfer their experience to AI algorithms.
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, the insecurity which may be felt at first would go away after people understand the standards of
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 technology and experience it. In conclusion,
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 there may be feelings of insecurity among
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 and passengers, benefits regarding to dramatic decrease in dangerous
accidents
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 and resolving the shortage of skilled vehicle operators are significant.

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coherence cohesion
Improve the logical flow between paragraphs; the transition from one idea to the next could be smoother.
task achievement
Include a more explicit example to strengthen the arguments. The current example about autopilot in planes is good but could be further developed.
language
There are minor grammatical errors and awkward phrases. Consider revising for clarity and conciseness.
introduction conclusion
The introduction clearly presents the writer's opinion, establishing the stance early in the essay.
introduction conclusion
The conclusion effectively summarizes the key points made in the essay.
task achievement
The use of the autopilot example for planes helps make the advantage of driverless cars relatable to the reader.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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