The pie charts below show the most common advantages and disadvantages of Bowen Island, according to a survey of visitors. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The pie charts below show the most common advantages and disadvantages of Bowen Island, according to a survey of visitors. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The pie charts provide information about the advantages and the disadvantages of Bowen Island
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tourists.
It is clear that
more than half of the survey participants were not satisfied with
its
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cost of living.
On the other hand
, they were very happy
about
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people
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the people
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who
live
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in
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the island. Focusing on the first picture, it can be seen that, after
high
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cost of living, the other three main reasons
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dissatisfaction were lack of entertainment(25%), poor weather(15%), and low food quality(10%). The proportion of people who were unhappy with entertainment was the same as the sum of the percentage of weather and that of food quality.
However
, 35% of
respondants
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respondents
thought that the place had
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great scenery. Culture and good
accomodation
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accommodation
accommodations
were
also
included in the most common advantages of
this
place, accounting for 12% and 11% respectively. But, we can still see that the
majorty
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majority
of visitors (77%) come to the island because of its residents and its scenery.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • scenic beauty
  • peaceful environment
  • wildlife viewing
  • limited accessibility
  • high costs
  • lack of amenities
  • tourist experience
  • perceived strongly
  • overwhelmingly stands out
  • main features
  • key advantages
  • primary disadvantages
  • notable aspects
  • common perceptions
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