In today's time the internet is making it easy to study online from home. some prefer online courses to study and they think it is better. Others prefer classroom education. discuss both views and share your opinion.

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It is true that the number of online courses is increasing. Nowadays, some people think that studying from home is better and others disagree with it. I still believe that classroom education is more efficient,

while

both ways have benefits and drawbacks. Studying online can bring us a couple of advantages because we can save

our

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time and

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have more options.

First,

we don'

need to commute

everyday

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to take a particular course or to go to university.

Furthermore

, people usually need to go to big cities to have a better education. It takes a lot of energy, time, and money. Students who work through their laptops can start their class in one second.

Also

, for those who live far away from cities, it will be a great

opportunitiy

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opportunity

to be educated at the same level as others who don'

live in the countryside.

On the other hand

this

mentioned method can affect students'

attitude

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. There are too many things to make them distracted when having online courses.

For instance

, they will have their phone next to them. Since no one is watching, professors wouldn'

be able to stop them from doing it or they would never even notice under the camera. During the

pandamic

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pandemic

, I experienced online lectures. None of my peers

were

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actually satisfied with their

clasess

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classes

because they knew that they couldn'

keep focusing on their

study

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. We might have to wake up early, but I think lectures in person will be more effective

to achieve

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better performance. In conclusion, we all know online courses have multiple advantages.

However

, I would prefer going to

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rather than staying home and studying alone.

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coherence cohesion

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coherence cohesion

The essay contains a clear introduction and conclusion, making it easy for the reader to follow the argument.

task achievement

The topic is fully addressed, with a balanced discussion on both online and classroom education accompanied by relevant examples.

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Specific examples such as the experience during the pandemic help ground the argument in real-life context.

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Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

for example
for instance
to illustrate this
to give a clear example
such as
namely
to illustrate
take, for example

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

276 words

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In today's time the internet is making it easy to study online from home. some prefer online courses to study and they think it is better. Others prefer classroom education. discuss both views and share your opinion.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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