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a museum near your home is looking for people to do part-time voluntaryl unpaid work. You would like to do some voluntarylunpaid work at the museum. Write a letter to the museum director to apply for the voluntarylunpaid work. In your letter explain why you want to do voluntarylunpaid work at the museum describe some skills and qualities you have that would be useful give details of when you would be available for work

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing with regard to your advertisement in the newspaper about
temporary
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 job at the museum. I am a
last
 year student of the history field and
this
 summer I will have graduated
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 the university. I am very interested
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 the job because it would not only be a great resume for me in
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 future
carrier
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 but
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wold
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 help you to give some museum work to someone other than your staff. I studied various
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material
materials
 including
history
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 of my country and ancient civilization that
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 pretty related to the job you offer. I would be able to help
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 new items that will enter the site and carry to the proper building. My schedule would be free in the afternoons
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 one short trip to my hometown to visit my
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parents
since
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28th
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Appril
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April
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 of May.
After
this
 summer I will be free for all the day. I look forward to hearing from you. Much obliged, Javad Khammar
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grammar
Double-check spelling and grammatical errors to enhance clarity and professionalism.
greeting closing
Improve the closing of your letter to fit formal letter-writing conventions.
content
You clearly explained why you are interested in the voluntary position.
task completion
You included relevant skills and availability, addressing all parts of the task.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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