Your are stayig at your friend’s house who is travelling to another country. A recent strom damaged the house. Write a letter to your friend and say What happened and when What was damaged in the house What needs to be done about it

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Dear Raman, I hope you are doing well. I am writing

this

letter to inform you about a thunderstorm that came

last

night near 11:30pm and it damaged your kitchen window. During the rainy time, everything was good but suddenly a strong wind broke the kitchen

glass

around 1:45 pm that you installed

last

month. I could not sleep properly

due to

the bad weather so, I decided to watch a movie, in the interval, the

glass

was damaged.

Then

, I fixed the window with the cardboard. But, heavy rain

also

wet the cardboard and water came into the kitchen. After an hour, I cleaned the area and fixed it again. Immediate action is necessary because it may cause theft in your house. Call the

glass

company to replace it with a new one because storms cannot damage it like

this

. And, request them to fix the best quality

glass

As well as

send me

further

details. I will take care of all before your return. If you are busy with work

then

send me the contacts of the company,and I will talk to them. Hoping for a prompt response from your side regarding

this

serious problem. Yours lovingly, Rohit

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coherence cohesion

To further enhance coherence and cohesion, consider using transitional words and phrases to connect your ideas more seamlessly, such as 'In addition,' or 'Moreover,' to provide more flow between paragraphs.

task achievement

The letter maintains a friendly and appropriate tone throughout, suitable for a communication with a friend.

task achievement

The letter provides a clear and concise account of the storm event, making it easy for the friend to understand what happened.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0
Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

200 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

severe weather conditions
structural integrity
mitigate
immediate steps
insurance claim
repair estimates
temporary fixes
contractors
coordination
overseeing repairs
valuables
reassurance

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