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The charts below show the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts display the causes of people going to
work
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 by cycling or driving.
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, the primary
reasons
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 for cycling to
work
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 are health and fitness and, less pollution.
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 the majority of drivers chose comfort. The lowest reason for cyclists was that cycling is faster than driving and for drivers, it was safer than cycling. The highest proportions of
reasons
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 for cyclists were health and fitness, and less pollution, at 30% each, followed by no parking problems at 15%. The smallest percentages of
reasons
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 people prefer to go to
work
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 by bike were no costs and faster than driving, at 13% and 12% respectively. Almost half of the people prefer to go to
work
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 driving
was
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for comfort, at 40%, followed by distance to
work
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 at 21%. The lower percentage of
reasons
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 were faster than cycling and
carry
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 things to
work
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 at 14% each. The lowest percentage of the reason was safer than cycling, at only 11%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words work, reasons with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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