In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?
Nowadays, a lot of local
people
from the villages are moving to the big cities to live and Use synonyms
due to
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reason
the number of communities in Add a comma
reason,
countryside
is falling. Add an article
the countryside
Although
it will have a positive impact on nature, Linking Words
people
will not be able to enjoy rural life.
It may have a good influence on the environment because of the low number of Use synonyms
people
, which means that the risk of harm the nature decreases. Use synonyms
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, if there are a lot of Linking Words
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, governments will have to get more space, and the trees can be cut by them to clear the area for building new houses. Use synonyms
Therefore
, it is better to live in the cities, which it is already full of buildings, rather than destroy the only lively and clear place.
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on the other hand
, if everybody moves from the countryside to the industrialized cities, it may lead to many arguments between generations. Linking Words
For example
, mostly old generation is living in the villages to avoid the modern technologies and noise, which the young generation really enjoys. So if older Linking Words
people
will live with young, they will try to teach teenagers about the past, which may lead to a revolt. Use synonyms
Therefore
, the older and younger generations should live separately to avoid conflicts.
In conclusion, in my point of view, decreasing the number of population in the villages is beneficial. The main reason for Linking Words
this
is that the economic condition of the environment is more important than the conflicts of citizens, which in the end will reconcile.Linking Words
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