It is a natural process for animal species to become extinct (e.g. Dinosaur, dodos…) There is no reason why people should try to prevent this from happening. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

It is explicit that a lot of

species

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disappeared

due to

the climate change caused by human

species

. Some believe that people are not responsible for

this

extinction.

However

, I aggressively assert that people have to protect nature because of the responsibility that they have

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and the sustainability of the human

species

.

Firstly

, humans have been predators of nature for a long time and are accused of most of the destruction. Especially, since the 19th century, when

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industrialization began, they have

conducted

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lots of harm to nature.

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, fossils have been used as human critical resources and fossils are one of the causes of climate change.

Furthermore

, a variety of

species

are helpful for human sustainability. Because animal

species

are important

humans’

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resources and medical materials.

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, most consumed animal

species

of

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them

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are concentrated

to

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a

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few

species

,

such

as

cow

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cows

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,

pig

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pigs

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, and

chicken

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chickens

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.

Consequently

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this

could cause severe failure of food control and lead to

a

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global starvation. In conclusion, the responsibility for destroying

ecosystem

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the ecosystem

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and the necessity to protect future resources apparently support my viewpoint. For these reasons, it is evident that we must prevent various animal

species

from disappearing.