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In the age of digital communication and social media,face-to-face interactions are becoming less common.Some people think that this is decreasing people's ability to communicate well in person. Do you agree or disagree with this view?

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These days, it is often argued that
due to
 the heavy use of social
media
people
 face problems interacting face-to-face. I completely disagree with
this
 notion and believe that believed that using digital communication makes
people
 able to communicate more. First of all, I believe that using social
media
 opens a wide variety of scopes to communicate worldwide. Nowadays, different types of social
media
 help us to communicate from one corner of the world to another within a second. Though,
people
 think that using social
media
 too frequently makes them introverts it creates opportunities to communicate personally.
For instance
, freelancers often communicate with their clients through online platforms and they often set meetings with them through video chat.
Thus
, online
media
 helps
people
 to communicate effectively and personally. Another reason why I disagree with
this
 statement is that through social
media
 we can easily communicate with our relatives, but it is tough for
people
 to regularly communicate with them. We regularly use social
media
 to communicate with our friends who are living abroad. To exemplify, during the COVID-19 situation it was quite impossible for us to meet and talk with others.
However
, we somehow get connected through social
media
 which makes us able to communicate face to face in future. Many international companies announced online webinars.
Thus
, we can get the opportunity to participate in
this
 kind of webinar and expand our communication skills even if it is not face-to-face.
To sum up
, I strongly believe that social
media
 is not a hindrance
for
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 communicating face-to-face because it allows us to communicate and participate in national and international webinars which
helps
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help
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 to communicate with
people
 too easily.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • digital communication
  • social media
  • face-to-face interactions
  • non-verbal cues
  • emotional intelligence
  • active listening
  • body language
  • facial expressions
  • tone of voice
  • nuanced communication
  • empathy
  • emotional responses
  • geographical barriers
  • misunderstandings
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