Some people think that children should start school at a very early age, but others believe that they should not go to school until they are older. Discuss both these views anf give your opinion
A group of people believe that
children
should began
to Change the verb form
begin
study
in school
at the very beginning of their age
, while
others think that children
should not go for academic study
unless they are old enough. In this
essay, I will discuss and elaborate on both perspectives.
To begin
with, those who prioritize that children
should go to school
at an early age
, the reason behind it, they think if their children
go to school
from the beginning of their life, they will be more efficient learners in academic study
. For example
, Mina started to go to school
at the age
of four, she learned basic logical math and improved over time; now she can solve very difficult math problems easily. So, by starting school
from an early age
; her family found that it improved her quality of academic knowledge and problem-solving skills as well.
On the other hand
, parents
and families who believe that their children
should not go to school
until the right time arrives, because of giving their children
proper family education. For instance
, Sadi's parents
gave him a good quality education at home and taught him how to behave with society as well as
guests including friends. He learned ethical adequacy from his parents
, it is beneficial for children
. Thereafter
, at the age
of seven, his parents
sent him to a school
to learn academic knowledge. Therefore
, he understood the academic lectures and lessons as well and he managed to make some friends and study
with them.
In conclusion, in my opinion, both perspectives have their own criteria to emphasise but I think children
should be more prioritised until they are mature enough to understand how to react to others and how to be friendly with other people, that will make them better at education than sending them to the school
at the early stage of child's life.Submitted by AL NURE FOYZUR REZA SUPRIO on
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coherence/structure
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Introduce and conclude your essay more distinctly to provide a clear structure for your discussion.
examples/relevance
The examples provided, such as the ones about Mina and Sadi, help illustrate your points and are relevant.
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You've addressed both views on when children should start school, which shows a balanced examination of the topic.