Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation,such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money.otgers argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Give your opinion.

The focus today is all about work and how to be rich to keep a specific lifestyle to maintain their lives. Different types of individuals consider that it is best to accept difficult
circumstances
,
such
as an unproductive job or financial deficiency. The rest claim that it is preferable to attempt to make
such
circumstances
better. In
this
essay, I will explain the different views and give my opinion.  
First,
there are two types of people. The one who works hard no matter the situation
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those kinds of individuals who have strong personalities and maintain their goals in life; the other type is the one who commands a situation and
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don't have the strength to change anything in their lives because of their bad childhood, or they follow a pattern passed down from their parents if they have any.
For example
, a person who is
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and has a normal childhood will be able to improve because he has everything he needs; he will be able to participate in courses to develop his skills on his own or with the help of his family. Ironically, a person with zero educational and hard
circumstances
will not be able to improve; they just want to get on with their day. If they have the basic fundamentals, they will be secured.
Second,
I believe that because of my character and outgrowing, I am able to tolerate difficult
circumstances
. As long as I can pay for my necessities, I am a very driven individual who will work at anything. In fact, I don't see it as being terrible or lazy on my part.
Overall
,
This
essay explores the many perspectives on wealth and work, with some people accepting challenging situations and others aiming for improvement.
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Good effort in addressing both sides of the argument, showing an understanding of different perspectives.
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Your introduction clearly states the topic and outlines the points for discussion.

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