Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation,such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money.otgers argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Give your opinion.

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The focus today is all about work and how to be rich to keep a specific lifestyle to maintain their lives. Different types of individuals consider that it is best to accept difficult

circumstances

such

as an unproductive job or financial deficiency. The rest claim that it is preferable to attempt to make

such

circumstances

better. In

this

essay, I will explain the different views and give my opinion.

First,

there are two types of people. The one who works hard no matter the situation

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those kinds of individuals who have strong personalities and maintain their goals in life; the other type is the one who commands a situation and

they

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apply

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don't have the strength to change anything in their lives because of their bad childhood, or they follow a pattern passed down from their parents if they have any.

For example

, a person who is

well educated

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and has a normal childhood will be able to improve because he has everything he needs; he will be able to participate in courses to develop his skills on his own or with the help of his family. Ironically, a person with zero educational and hard

circumstances

will not be able to improve; they just want to get on with their day. If they have the basic fundamentals, they will be secured.

Second,

I believe that because of my character and outgrowing, I am able to tolerate difficult

circumstances

. As long as I can pay for my necessities, I am a very driven individual who will work at anything. In fact, I don't see it as being terrible or lazy on my part.

Overall

This

essay explores the many perspectives on wealth and work, with some people accepting challenging situations and others aiming for improvement.

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Try to provide specific examples to illustrate your points more clearly.

coherence cohesion

Make sure each paragraph has a clear central idea, and link your ideas logically. Transition words would be helpful.

coherence cohesion

Ensure your conclusion summarizes the main points effectively and presents a clear restatement of your own views.

task achievement

Good effort in addressing both sides of the argument, showing an understanding of different perspectives.

coherence cohesion

Your introduction clearly states the topic and outlines the points for discussion.

Fully explain your ideas

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Sentence 1 - Background statement
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Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

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Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

Sentence 1 - Summary
Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

295 words

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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation,such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money.otgers argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Give your opinion.

Fully explain your ideas

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