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The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy ni 20 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy ni 20 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two pairs of pie charts present the information of the population of two different countries,
Yemen
 and Italy, respectively. The given time period is from 2000 and the future estimation of 2050.
Overall
, it can be seen that three different
age
 groups from 15-
59
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years
 are rising in Italy as compared to
Yemen
,
whereas
 the
age
group
 of 0 to 14
years
are
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is
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 more than Italy.
Moreover
, people of
60
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the 60
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 plus
age
group
 will slightly increase in
Yemen
while
 Italy will see a sharp
rise
 in
this
age
group
. Both countries will see
the
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a
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rise
 in
15
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the 15
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-59
years
age
group
 of people in the next five decades where
Yemen
 represented 46.3
percent
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per cent
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 in 2000, which will see a
rise
 in 2050
by
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growing to 57.3
percent
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per cent
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.
On the other hand
, in 2000 same
age
group
 remained at 61.6
percent
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per cent
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, which covers more than
a
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half of the data,
while
 it will see a sharp decline in 2050 at 46.2
percent
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per cent
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. In both countries,
60+
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the 60+
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years
age
group
 illustrates a considerable difference, like in
Yemen
starts
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started
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from
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at
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3.6percent
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3.6 per cent
 in 2000 and will go up by the increase of almost 2
percent
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per cent
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at
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to
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 5.7
percent
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per cent
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 only in 2050.
Whereas
, Italy will see a sharp
rise
 in the same
group
 of
age
 from 24.1
percent
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per cent
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 in 2000 to 42.3
percent
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per cent
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 in 2050.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words yemen, age, years, group, rise, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • population distribution
  • age group
  • young population
  • mature population
  • aging society
  • demographic shift
  • proportion
  • dominant
  • balanced distribution
  • projected increase
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