Friendships that take place online are as not meaningful as those where people meet each other face to face. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Through out
the years friendships Correct your spelling
Throughout
became
Verb problem
have
evolve
by using Wrong verb form
evolved
the
social media Correct article usage
apply
platform
, where Fix the agreement mistake
platforms
people
can communicate online. Which is
for some, is not Unnecessary verb
apply
that
worthwhile Correct word choice
as
than
spending Change preposition
as
time
face to
Add a hyphen
face-to-face
face
in real life.
First,
it depends on the situation of the individuals, how
they can communicate Correct word choice
and how
to
their friends. Change preposition
with
Besides
being far from each other, living different
cities or countries, communicating online is the best option. Change preposition
in different
Also
, searching for a new friend with the same interests,
is easier online where other Remove the comma
apply
people
do. For the
reasonCorrect determiner usage
this
of
, they can't find genuine connections to the Change preposition
apply
people
who
they already Correct pronoun usage
whom
known
. Wrong verb form
know
For instance
, to be
friends and Change the verb form
being
communicate
Wrong verb form
communicating
through
online can give necessary comfort, like being there and listening to each other will help the friendship Change preposition
apply
connected
even miles apart.
Wrong verb form
connect
On the contrary
, being face to
Add a hyphen
face-to-face
face
can have a huge advantage than
Change preposition
over
the
friendship online. It's easier to have and create good memories for the Correct article usage
apply
people
who is
already physically there. Change the verb form
are
For example
, the physical touch, going outside, doing
the hobbies that you both love can improve the bonding at the same Correct word choice
and doing
time
you can have deep communication with them that it
will Correct pronoun usage
apply
last
for a life
Correct your spelling
lifetime
time
. Despite that sometimes it's hard to communicate and express your feelings in real time
, this
is just an experiences
that can add up for your growth.
Correct the article-noun agreement
experience
To conclude
, I believe having friendship face
to face
is the best option for me. Furthermore
, it's important you can go immediately to someone who is already there physically when you need a companion too. It gives assurance of comfort and security, which you can't find online.Submitted by chesleykerserarellano on
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