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Computers and A.I technology are increasinglybeing used for online education. Can artifical intelligence enhance the learning experience? Is this a positive and negative development?

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In recent years, A.I and computers have widely been used for learners to learn online as they enhance
students
' experience with various entertainment and information sources.
This
 writer believes that
this
 is a positive development
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because
students
 are flexible to
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their
 study schedules. One reason
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 to be considered is
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that aritifical
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aritifical
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artificial
 intelligence
support
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students
 with their essays and tasks.
Due to
 the wide network, people are able to use it for their questions and topics.
This
 helps them to finish their work quickly and have more time on other subjects.
Moreover
, not only
students
 but
also
 teachers find it useful. Using digital gadgets and modern
equipments
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, they can design beautiful and interesting lessons for
students
, which may attract them and the lessons less boring and dull.
As a result
,
students
 enjoy the classes and focus more on them so that they are able to pass the exams easily.
According to
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research in Canada, a primary school used 3D glasses to help children understand
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wildlife and nature. Most of them said that it was exciting and started having
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this
 field. It needs to be understood that AI helps
students
 to be flexible
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 their study timetable. Because individuals can access
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 at
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, it is convenient for those who need to learn at unsocial hours.
Students
 are able to search for their necessary and extra materials, which is difficult to do
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with our
without
 computers. They do not depend on their teachers but can understand their knowledge,
in other words
, it takes less time to learn and
students
 can put more
efforts
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on
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 their fields and
weakness
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. Taking Japan as an example, teenagers still learn well by using AI despite spending much time on school clubs. Taking all into
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, computers and artificial intelligence enhance the learning experience.
Hence
, they have positive impacts on
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students
 because of giving flexible study schedules.

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General
Make sure to proofread your essay for minor spelling or grammatical errors. For instance, 'aritifical' should be 'artificial', and 'withour' should be 'without'. Addressing these will refine your essay quality.
Task Achievement
Consider providing a more balanced discussion on the topic by also mentioning potential downsides or challenges of using AI in education, even if your ultimate conclusion is positive. This can give your argument more depth.
Coherence & Cohesion
Your essay shows good use of varied sentence structures and vocabulary. Keep exploring new ways to express your ideas to hold the reader's attention.
Coherence & Cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion frame your argument well, but try to include a brief summary of your main points in the conclusion to reinforce your argument to the reader.
Task Achievement
You provided clear and relevant examples, such as the use of 3D glasses in Canadian schools and how AI assists Japanese teenagers. This strongly supports your argument.
Coherence & Cohesion
Your essay is structured logically, making it easy for the reader to follow your argument.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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