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Many students today may study abroad for a part or far all of their course . Although studying abroad has many benefits for the individual student, it also has a number of disadvantages. To what extent you agree or disagree?

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In the modern busy life,it is believed by some individuals that studying overseas for a part or far full of their courses
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 others consider that has negative effects. I am in complete agreement
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 learning in foreign countries for both part and full-seasoned
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, one of the most compelling advantages of studying overseas is the opportunity for personal growth and cultural exposure.Living in a foreign country allows students to immerse themselves in different traditions, languages, and lifestyles, fostering adaptability and open-mindedness .
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, studying in Japan can help a student to be in a correct position and obeying sanitation rules, knowing Japanese,
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adapting their career. The second worth mentioning reason supporting
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studying abroad can enhance career prospects . Graduating from a reputable international university is frequently perceived as a mark of distinction by employers, particularly in competitive fields
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 students develop valuable soft skills
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 communication which are highly sought after in the global job market. In stark contrast
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 be fair to admit that tuition fees are extremely expensive and the other expenses of
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 would be even higher than tuition costs .
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 I would still consider studying in foreign countries
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 more advantageous. By the way of conclusion, studying overseas presents some challenges
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 it is a rewarding job because being
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 professional job owner leads to work in high-valued offices with high
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sufficient for luxury living expenses
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 it improves
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 of families in society.
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task response
Ensure the essay addresses all parts of the prompt in more depth. The elaboration on the disadvantages of studying abroad could be enhanced to provide a balanced view, as the prompt asks to consider both sides.
task response
Work on providing more specific examples to support your points effectively. Examples used should directly relate to the argument made and clarify the point further.
coherence cohesion
Improve the logical flow between paragraphs and ideas. Use transition words and phrases to help guide the reader through your points smoothly.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph develops a single main idea clearly. This will enhance the clarity and overall organization of your essay.
introduction conclusion
The introduction clearly states your position and outlines the structure of the essay, setting up expectations for the reader.
coherence cohesion
You demonstrate a clear logical structure in your response, with main ideas that support your argument.
task achievement
You effectively address the question, offering many reasons and supporting them with logical points, demonstrating a good understanding and engagement with the topic.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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