You are interested in applying for a scholarship program to study at a foreign university. Write a letter to inquire about the course. In your letter: •explain which course you are interested in •say what you know about the university • explain why you should receive the scholarship

Dear Sir, I hope
this
letter finds you well. I am writing
this
letter to let you know that I am interested in applying for
Bachelors
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Bachelor's
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in
Business
Administration course. I studied commerce in my higher secondary and I want to learn more about
business
administration in detail. I have
had
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heard many good things about
the
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Brighton College. As a leading name in teaching various
Business
courses, the faculty is highly praised by many
business
magazines, because the teachers are very experienced. Adding more to it, the unique methodologies that
institute
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the institute
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employ
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employs
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to teach difficult topics are
also
admired by the passouts of
this
college. I have heard about the prestigious scholarship that
institute
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the institute
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gives to
the
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pupils, who
scored
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above 95 per cent
of
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marks in their higher secondary exams.
Therefore
, I propose myself for
this
scholorship
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scholarship
, because I scored 98 per cent of marks in my higher secondary exams.I hope you will give me the information I asked for and I am looking forward to hearing from you . Yours faithfully, Jatinder.
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coherence cohesion
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task achievement
The letter is well-organized with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion.
task achievement
You have addressed all points in the prompt, ensuring a complete response.
coherence cohesion
Your greeting and closing were correctly used and appropriately formal.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inquire about
  • scholarship program
  • foreign university
  • course of interest
  • field of study
  • academic achievements
  • extracurricular involvement
  • career goals
  • unique aspects
  • reputation and ranking
  • faculty and research centers
  • strong candidate
  • support my aspirations
  • pursue my passion
  • enhancing my skills
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